Help with Complementing in Japanese

[fabianwolf19882304]

Hey guys,

this is my first post in the forums so.... Hi, everybody!
My question is a little bit weird, I know, but I'd really appreciate it, if you could help me out.

First of all as a background: I will do an internship in Tokyo beginning in April for 6 months. I have been learning japanese for 2 years now but I am still faaar away from feeling in any way comfortable speaking/writing.....

So anyway, my question is for the following example scenario: I am waiting at the bus/train station and a beautiful girl walks by. I really want to talk to her, so I run up to her and say :
"Excuse me, can I tell you something quickly? I know this is a bit weird, but I saw you walking by and I thought you looked really nice/beautiful! So I wanted to come and say Hi!"

My translation would be:
"すみません、ちょっと　あなたに　なにを　いって　も　いい　ですか。
わたしは　あなたを　みたながら　かけぬけました。と　あなたは　かなり　きれい　と　おもいます。
だから　あなたを　はなし　かける　と　おもいます。"

Could I say it like this? Or does it sound completely weird?

I know, this is a really strange question but that is just the way I meet and talk to girls!
Thank you very much in advance for your help!

Regards,
Fabian

[community.japanese]

fabianwolf19882304-san,
こんにちは
Wow, 6 months internship? That's exciting!

Hmmm, let's see what I'd like to hear in such situation....
すみません、ちょっと　いいですか。きを　わるく　しないで　ほしいのですが、
あなたが　とても　きれい　なので、　どうしても　それを　つたえたくて　はなしかけました。
This means,
Excuse me; I don't want you to get offended or anything, but I came to talk to you becasue I wanted to
tell you that (I thought) you're very beutiful.

This kind of straight message from strange person can be scary, and not very our culture common thing.
Some people just don't like to be bothered by flirting, so I thought きを　わるく　しないで　ほしいのですが
might give a bit of respect and consideration. Unless girls are really used to receive such compliments,
they'd probably think you're a weird and strange (easy) foreigner and will immediately keep distance. Telling things like
I wrote in a very "shy" and modest way might soften sudden approach and give better impressions

Hope you'll have a good luck once in Japan

Natsuko(奈津子),
Team JapanesePod101.com

[fabianwolf19882304]

こんにちは　なつこ-さん、　ほんとうに　ありがとう！:)
Yeah, I am pretty excited about the internship already!

I know that this is very forward and that it can be overwhelming. I don't think this is common anywhere so I am used to that
In german and english I am able to soften that approach and make it clear that it's honest and not some "cheesy pick-up line".
However, my japanese is not that great, so I really appreciate your help!

Let's see what reactions I will get out of this

Regards,
Fabi

[community.japanese]

Fabi-san,
どういたしまして！

And you're always welcome to practice "cheesy pick-up lines in Japanese" on us

Natsuko(奈津子),
Team JapanesePod101.com