Need Sakubun Help

[unuboldbattogoo_519979]

SO I am going to give a sakubun for a japanese High school in a few months and I would love if you guys give me recommendations to help me
Topic is What will you do after you get into school

Is it ok if I start with 私の名前は(name)です。(country)から来ました。?

[community.japanese]

Hi!

Thank you for posting the comment and sorry for our late reply. I hope it's not too late....

Yes, you can start your essay with the introductory sentences. For the second sentence, I'd recommend changing it to :
出身は（country) です。出身（しゅっしん）

Good luck with your 作文！

Regards,
Miki H
Team JapanesePod101.com